Tie Dye Hero

I question some of your word choices in the first stanza... Tin doens't seem to fit, and neither does 'ill person' i'm not sure if you mean sick person, or ...

The title is spelled wrong. Anyways, and forgiving, to those they know. doesn't make sense... forgiving those they know? Is that what you mean? You need some extra clarity there. ...

The rhyme scheme seems so forces...especially with the occasional false rhyme...and... there is one couplet that doesn't rhyme at all! If you are going to adhere to a rhyme scheme, ...

This poem adheres to a very basic rhyme scheme. I think rhyme schemes are very weak..but seeing as that is the structure you've chosen...I won't attack it to brutally. This ...